Skip to main content
  1. Life
  2. Religion & Spirituality
  3. Western Religions

As poetry evolves ...

See also

Tentatively entitled: Zac's Lilies/A Poetry Anthology

"A poem evolves only as the poet matures."

Dedication: To my Son, Ben, whom I love with all my heart, all my soul and all my might, help me to live my life free of anger and bitterness. Search for us as we for you in the brightness of the starlit skies. But unlike the night of November 22, 2000, let's find each other this time.

Preface (under construction)

Wednesday, December 22, 2000, the day of our son's death ended quietly in my apartment where I fell asleep after a drink or two.

'Tomorrow will be unlike any day I have ever experienced.' Does it make sense to the reader to say I knew what was going to happen; I just did not know what to expect?

I have been writing about Ben since the publication of my first poem "Mourning Reflections" in an anthology of bereavement poetry, Passing. It was a bittersweet achievement; here my first published poem but could barely tell a soul about it.

As writers we change. Whether “change” is synonymous with “growth” is a question one can answer only on a case by case basis. For example, I shortened the original poem "Mourning Reflections" to four lines, renamed it "Graveside", each line representative of an essential element: 1) finality, 2) incredulity, 3) obedience, 4) acceptance.

"Mourning's Reflections"

Illusory strength...
quivering knees.
Witnessing ...
irreversible finality.

Near the edge ...
swaying,
clutching a moment's time more
until words enough, this end a beginning,
reality obscene.

Linger intimate friends,
voices hushed.
Sobbing disbelief ...
soon resignation,
what choice ...
really?

Faith, Thou art with me,
though alone I remain
but a shadow of time before.
A mound of earth returns to its void,
last glance, turn to depart
from this ground.

Fading memory ...
searching
mind moments
yet recalled.

(end of original poem)

"Graveside" the author ponders his son's burial …

1) We swayed by the edge until cold winds bid us leave.

2) Sobbing gasps hush the whispers of lingering friends.

3) What could we have done but return the earth whence it came,

4) then depart lest happier moments burst like bubbles upon children's fingertips.

(End of "Graveside")

Each one corresponds to the same numbered line of the poem.

Some of the language discarded from the "Mourning Reflections" evolved into another poem "Mourning Raindrops” (title submitted by Renee Ransenberg-Gale)

"Mourning Raindrops"

Quietly I knew He had called for you.
'How, without you, would life be to live?'
Nary a moment before I'd always thought,
'my life for yours I wouldst give.'

Far fewer fallen were the raindrops that morn
than the tears our mourning eyes did shed.
Yet, we take such comfort in knowing Son,
to olden souls wilt thou soon be wed.

I have no more words Ben than these to say,
How difficult it has been for all without thee.
But of a more special love I do not know
Than mine for you and yours for me.

The author welcomes Civil Comments (of either a positive or negative nature).

Advertisement

Life

  • Dead babies found
    Seven dead babies were found in Utah resident Megan Huntsman's old home
    Video
    Shocking Discovery
  • Kendall Jenner
    Get the Coachella looks: Kendall Jenner’s nose ring, green hair and edgy nails
    Camera
    Coachella Look
  • Dog's Easter basket
    How to fill your dog’s Easter basket with the perfect toys
    Easter Basket
  • Rabbit owners
    Bringing home the bunny: Important information for rabbit owners
    Camera
    7 Photos
  • Haunted island
    The world’s most haunted island may soon be the most haunted luxury resort
    Haunted Resort
  • Sunken ferry
    Search continues for missing passengers after a ferry sinks off the South Korean coast
    Video
    Sunken Ferry

User login

Log in
Sign in with your email and password. Or reset your password.
Write for us
Interested in becoming an Examiner and sharing your experience and passion? We're always looking for quality writers. Find out more about Examiner.com and apply today!